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Trampling on people will dirty your shoes

Every person is a spark that helps light Humanity

When the darkness surrounds you; become the light

Courage is saying what you think instead of what you should

To prepare a meal carefully is to know the art of patience
                          要准备膳食仔细地是知道耐心艺术
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I was up late thinking and the idea of man trampling all over each other made me think of this
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Great thoughts. Thank you for sharing.
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Mood: Joy ~DJFlat Apr 13, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank You
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Mood: Bemused ~emilywinters Apr 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I cannot Critique this, so I will write my Critique here. I think adding a period after 'shoes' would solidify that as your main idea, your most important sentence. Humanity shouldn't be capitalized unless 'person' is, because the People make up Humanity. A comma should come after 'you', not a semicolon, just speaking gramatically. I think you should break the line about courage at the word 'think' just to give it more gravity. I also think this needs to be longer and you need to expound more on your ideas. However, having said all that, I think this is a solid piece.
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Mood: Joy ~DJFlat Apr 10, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much; I shall take all this on board and i will hopefully make the next one even better
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